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October 2014
Locavore Essay
The locavore movement is becoming a
widespread movement everywhere, with people absolutely falling in love with the
concept; and maybe even the execution. [Unknown A1] However, there are a few parts to it, that people
don't necessarily realize or think about; that becoming a locavore is entirely
beneficial. One can give many reasons as to how and why eating locally grown
food is, oh, so much greater, than the food you buy in the supermarket; that
had traveled thousands of miles. On the other hand, there are those who believe
that the nutrition difference is not as great as it initially seems, there are
other methods used for food production that use a lot of energy and continue to
leave a large carbon footprint, and lastly, that not everyone lives within a
local farm or an area with good soil for farming, as the entire Earth [Unknown A2] is made of rich soil.
“There will be nutritional
differences, but they'll be marginal.” (Source B) A large part of the reason
that people would choose to be a locavore, is based on the thought that [Unknown A3] we don't get a good supply from the foods
that we eat compared to the nutritional values of the locally grown foods that
we could be eating. According to Marion Nestle, a dietitian, says that
there might be nutritional differences , usually only if your “local” soil is really
great, they wouldn't be that distant. [Unknown A4] According to her, “We're just not
nutrient-deprived.” Another big idea of the locavore movement is the thought of
leaving a significantly smaller carbon footprint by eating the food less traveled.
Yet, there are other “energy-hogging” factors in the production of food. [Unknown A5] (Source C) “But New Zealand lamb is raised on
pastures with a small carbon footprint, whereas most English lamb is produced
under intensive factory-like conditions with a big carbon footprint.” With
this, it is seen that the pastures that are local to you, aren't really the best the best place for you to
get food from in terms of the wasted energy. There is also an issue regarding
“food miles”. With certain growers being able to supply more people, further
away, and with a higher supply of food; compared to another grower with the
less amount of produce and miles traveled. “The critical measure here is not
food miles but apples per gallon.” Following those thoughts of locavore
consumers, they don't necessarily know about actually growing food in regard to
processing practices, water availability, packaging waste and fertilizer
application.[Unknown A6]
The largest problem found with the
locavore food industry has to do with our current societies. [Unknown A7] “In the United States, 80 percent of us live in
large, densely-populated urban areas, usually on the coast, and typically
hundreds of miles, from the major centers of food production.” (Source F) How
is it that the world can become relying on just what's near you to get the food
you need to survive, if you don't live near a place of food production?[Unknown A8]
[Unknown A1]Confusing sentence as doesn't shine clarity on the
matter of the locavore movement. Could/ should be written more along the lines
of “ However, there are a few parts to it, that people don't necessarily
realize or think about; as to if and why becoming a locavore could be entirely
beneficial.”
[Unknown A5]Initially didn't see the relevance of this quote
and what it is truly conveying; at this point, I was looking for a good quote to use that shows that local
pastures aren't necessarily wasting less energy.
[Unknown A6]I think that adding more substantial information
into this paragraph would be beneficial to the reader.
[Unknown A7]Really impressed with the use of this quote to use
as a counterclaim to earlier written claims on the locavore movement.
[Unknown A8]Even thought the locavore movement sounds great in
concept., not everyone could participate in it due to their geographical
location. I thought that this was a very important point to dicusss, and am
pleased with ending the essay with it. Also, after reading the entirety of my
essay, I have noticed some unappealing flaws in my writing and words that I
seem to continuously repeat.. One flaw would be not providing a thorough enough
analysis on quotes used and another would be possibly quotes that are too
lengthy. The word “thought” was continuously used throughout the essay, and
even in the comments, which was somewhat annoying.
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